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EJ Trask's avatar

you are so great at writing action scenes. i’m jealous!

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Addam Ledamyen's avatar

Just found this today from the Sword and Saturday post. You had me hooked with the opening! It’s a great line. The relationship between the Knight and Copy Knight is so fun and intriguing and endearing. You make us care about the characters really fast so that the twist is super shocking and effective, but you’ve also set it up well enough that it seems perfectly in character. It absolutely pulled me in and makes me want to keep going (which I will). Also, I’m further intrigued by the second storyline and excited to see how the two will connect. Minor confusions: There were a couple of times when a new character entered a scene with a line of dialogue and, because the pace moves so wonderfully quick, I automatically assumed someone currently in the scene had said it and then had to reread in order to get my mental image accurate before moving on. Ultimately it became clear, but those little moments took me out of the story a bit each time. But overall it’s wonderful writing!

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